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PoopyMcButt

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Well the audio was the entertaining part of this flash. Sadly you had no part in creating the audio, so I can no score you for it.

The animation was ROUGH, it was boring and poorly portrayed. My suggestion is if you are going to use audio from another source, try your best to interpret your own ideas into it. For this you are relying completely on the audio to carry out the entertainment value. Maybe try and animate some of the described actions that were being discussed.

As far as animation goes it just takes practice, keep at it. Let your creativity flow.

Good luck.

bnpla responds:

half a star? :(

Well I for sure do not doubt edd had influence on you. But I mean come on, a man that is dear to you died. You seem to have lazily thrown together a flash with ads and links to everywhere you are on the internet. Honestly, is this a tribute to Edd or a chance for you to pick up a few more followers, and some cash. That's why I believe it was thrown together quickly so it was seen during the majority of the hype oh his death.

Here is my opinion on the flash as a flash (excluding its message)

The art could have very well been a LOT better, in the past you have shown that your acceptable at drawing. So my question is, why did you not put your full potential into something like this? I feel if you are honoring someone dear to you. It would be a time to truly show your skills and flex your abilities. If that adds a week to how long it takes to produce. So be it. It wont be criticized for not being posted immediately after.

But fine, I can forgive you for that. What really bugs me is that the whole thing just looks like one big bill board for yourself, and your activity on the internet, with some flash ads.

Also this disorganized sounding "Advertisement revenue from this movie will be donated to Cancer Research." What organization are you sponsoring? If you have not picked out an organization by now, then sorry to say I honestly do no believe you are really intending to donate a penny. Because you might make like $15 tops off this flash. Then when you hit the cap of $50 you will get your check and say "well what $15 gonna do?" and save it.

Yusuf responds:

I am very insulted by that last paragraph. I am a man of my word! And so what if I put links on the preloader? many other people do it.

Also, Cancer Research is an actual charity: http://www.cancerresearchuk.org/

The art wasn't the main point of the flash, the point was to get the message out.

And also the earning cap is $100 now, FAIL

So yeah, I just made your entire review obsolete LOL

Decent stuff, the cinimatics were fantastic! The art wa a bit bland and lacked detail. But the action of it was well carried out. Great job man.

Stop submitting this everytime you add 2 seconds. Finish the flash and upload the finial product. We don't need to see it again just because you added 2 more seconds.

Its lazily tweened, and tells me nothing about your flash but what you renamed a premade character to.

You have a lot to improve before starting the production of this project.

woh, what just happened!?
The frame by frame work was great, I much like the part when she stretches her eyes. I don't know why but that stuck out the most. The posters on the wall were an amusing easter egg, and a nice touch to the environment.

The art was very simplistic, the lines and colors worked very smooth. Although I do enjoy seeing some shading, I don't think it was necessarily.

"A short thing I put together in a few days, experimenting with voice acting & audio mixing."

I'll bring some attention to your main focus.

The only thing I see that could use improvement is your voice. Shout voices are really hard to grasp, so it really wouldn't be fair to fixate on it. Sometimes it helps to let adrenalin flush through you, to the point where you almost feel angry when shouting. Almost convince yourself that you're taking the place of the character. At the risk of sounding corny, BE THE CHARACTER!
Aside from the shouts, the sleepy voice I felt was nailed quite well.

As far as audio mixing, it was very basic. It held a great balance and you didn't add too much, or not enough. You seem to have a firm grasp on mixing your audio.

Kudos! Over all it was very enjoyable and entertaining. Great job :)

jaxxy responds:

I damn near lost my voice during the shouting. x_x But yes, you make a very good point - shouting lines are an art! And I don't voice act... but if I work on it I'm sure I'll get better someday. :D
Thanks a lot for the review, Poopy. :3

Eh, its alright.

The censoring was a bit annoying, its the internet. Idk why you censored yourself. The voices were acceptable, a but awkward at times but nothing praiseworthy. They worked though.

The character animation is what held most the weight. The character animation was solid it kudos for your effort! May I suggest adding a bit of shading in the future. Makes things look a lot fancier.

The backgrounds were very bland and not that attractive. Could use a lot of improving there.

The writing and dialog could use some work, I felt the funny lines were not delivered correctly. I honestly didn't laugh or chuckle. I was more amused with some of the comic art over the dialog.

Keep at it though, you have potential.

ThePivotsXXD responds:

I actually added the bleeps cause I thought bleeping sounded funnier than the actual words. But that's just my opinion. I know I could've done better with most backrounds and character animations but I had hardly anytime to finish this up, I finished it last night. :c Thank you for the review though!

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